Below is an example body paragraph from my "Values Paper:"
After growing up in southern California, living outdoors throughout most of my childhood, I have come to love, cherish, and respect Mother Nature (This is my topic sentence, I have introduced that I will be talking about respect and protection for nature). It is hard to imagine my life without interacting with the ocean in one way or another, my value of environmental protection comes my life long experiences with the ocean (This is the source of my value). . I am a surfer, which means I spend a great deal of time in the ocean. Over the course of my 15+ years in and out of the water, I have been to some amazing places and been exposed to some incredible cultures. I have learned the beauty and the power that the ocean holds. However, none of these experiences come close to have as great an impact upon my life as the one that I am about to share. I was 18 years old at the time, and Southern California had just been battered by a massive tropical rain system that came up from Southern Mexico. It was unusual for the amount rain to fall at that time of year. Because it had not rained all summer, there was a lot of pollution just sitting around waiting to be washed from the streets into the sewer system and carried to Pacific Ocean. Like any great storm that originates in the Pacific Ocean, this one carried with it, a large ocean swell, traveling thousands of miles, crashing on the shores of Southern California. There was no way I was going to miss this swell. I knew that the danger of swimming after a storm meant that I would possibly get sick, but I was willing to risk it. I surfed some of the best waves of my life that day. However, I also swam in some of the most polluted water I have ever been in. It was brown, oily, and smelt like raw sewage. Two days after being in the ocean, I became sick with an ear and lung infection (These sentences are my specific example of where my value came from). From that moment on, I realized that it was necessary to learn environmental protection issues, and to try and educate as many people as possible about the dangers of a degraded natural environment (This is my transition statement - moving from environmental protection to education).
that is the length for 1 paragraph also?
ReplyDeleteThats the length that it took me to give a SPECIFIC example. You might be able to do it shorter. But I want the reader to know where this value came from, and this is the amount that it took for me to be satisfied that he or she would have a clear understanding of my value.
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